Here are some notes from a writer’s class I attended. (Perhaps I need to trust my confidence in writing)
The author intrusion, a favourite technique of the Victorian novelists as they address the ‘dear reader’, is considered, I am informed, as old fashioned in modern fiction. In the early twentieth century it tended to be a technique used to educate or persuade the reader of the author’s view either for political or religious purposes and masquerading as subtle propaganda. This would be deliberately invasive in the story through the various characters to influence the reader. At times a complete portion of exposition would detract from the main story to get the author’s didactic views exposed to the audience. These methods were deliberate and were an accepted format and mostly obvious to the readers.
However, in modern fiction there are tendencies of carelessness by authors, which are particularly intrusive and cause people to stumble as they read. This interferes with the literary trance readers may have, as they are completely engrossed with the character’s predicament. Then, an aside or overly explanatory sentence may suddenly seem out of place or else overstate the obvious, spoiling their enjoyment.
Some of the unintentional author intrusions arise from:
Telling things the character could never possible know.
All characters sound the same.
Paying too much attention to the setting and forgetting the story.
Putting the cart before the horse.
Or worse – repeating information laboriously in dialogue, for no other purpose than to be certain the reader understands.
I am advised to become an invisible author.
Sky as blue as a summer sea
And weather blowing oven heat
Turning leaves on autumn trees
To form inspirations and wind
Thoughts floating through the mind
Of the anonymous invisible writer.