Last night I dreamt of Carmen.

Carmen. 100 word Wednesday

Good morning sunshine, you make my heart sting.
Cycling along to meet Carmen waiting by the falls.
My darling Carmen what secret do you have to tell?
I’m coming, cycling as fast as I can, I’m coming.
Please wait, I’m coming, I’m cycling as fast as I can.
What is it? What do you have to tell me, waiting by the falls?
I’m coming, cycling as fast as I can, I’m coming.
I see you smiling, crying. What is it? Keep away from the falls.
I’m coming, cycling as fast as I can, I’m coming.
I am cycling as fast as I can, tears rolling down my cheeks.
I wake, let me sleep, let me cycle. Every night Carmen waits.
I cycled as fast as I could.
Good morning sunshine. You make my heart sting.

 

8 responses to “Last night I dreamt of Carmen.

  1. You’ve captured love and torment beatifully.

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  2. The narrator’s emotional frenzy comes across clearly – great use of rhythm and repetition.

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  3. Fascinating tragedy. 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀

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  5. I agree with the use of repetition — the hurried frenzy is apparent, coupled with the imagery of cycling faster and faster, it’s a strong story of suspense. Thank you so much for joining our writing community this week 🙂

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