The Return

News Flash – My short story Lilly-Anne has just been published on literally Stories a world wide short story site. Your views and comments are appreciated.

Lilly Anne – by James McEwan

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Friday Fictioneers   (slightly late this week, enjoy)

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The Return.

Shrouded in monsoon mist along the Chakkar Road, Jazlaan viewed the ruined and dilapidated house. Seventy years ago, Partition had driven her family away. 

Still, in the kitchen, she smelled the warmth of cardamom and cinnamon sizzling in ghee and heard echoes of children lamenting in Urdu. Dust, like Chapatti flour, covered over the floors.

Mould consumed damp walls, the moths her gowns. What wealth and chattels she saved were left to grandchildren now, or burned on her pyre. The silver blacken mirror on the wall reflected her joy as she brushed her gossamer hair. 

Her spirit was home.

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39 responses to “The Return

  1. Good story James. Congrats on Lilly-Anne!

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  2. Beautiful writing with so many layers. And congrats on the publication.

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  3. And congratulations on the story too. 🙂

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  4. Wonderful imagery. A great, poignant story.

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  5. Beautifully done, James. You’ve created such a vivid atmosphere.

    And, congratulations on your publication. Here’s to many more!

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  6. Excellent. And Superb Congratulations. 😎🥀😎🥀🌺🎊🎉🎈🌷

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  7. You conjured up sights and sounds and smells, and the feeling of mould in damp rooms. Excellent descriptions. And your conclusion that she was a spirit who had returned to her family home from before Partition was both dramatic and poignant.

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  8. At least she made it home eventually. Sad and poignant tale James

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  9. I loved this, the imagery, the atmosphere. Wonderful.
    And as for Lily-Anne. Wow! I loved it and congratulations!

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  10. Great use of the senses. It’s interesting that her spirit was reflected in the mirrror.

    Congrats on the publication!

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    • Thank you Russell. I thought of the reflection in the mirror as being part of Jazlaan’s imagination.
      If you are interested, I would appreciate your view of my contribution “Lilly-Anne” on Literally Stories. (it’s free).

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  11. Artistically written, James.
    Fantastic storytelling.
    Congratulations on the publication.🙂

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  12. So many lovely turns of phrase in this gorgeous little story.

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  13. Nice Story.
    And my Spirit will be fishing in a creek in the Cascade mountains. How about yours James?

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  14. A lovely ghost story. Well done.

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  15. Such an evocative piece, playing to all our senses – beautifully done.

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  16. Congratulations on another wonderful story.

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  17. I wasn’t expecting her to be a spirit. Lovely descriptive writing.

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  18. This is so beautiful. The reality of being displaced for a lifetime, never losing that longing for home. I love the thought of joy in death. Really love this!

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  19. Well written take, although I don’t understand what a blacken mirror is

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    • Yes, I was trying to describe on old mirror where the slivering has streaked with oxidation underneath the glass. I have seen a lot of old mirrors like this – perhaps by two word description isn’t quite right.
      Thanks for reading.

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      • I see, I think. Did you mean blackened? I thought it was a new word to me, which was why I was asking. I know what you mean about the mirrors. They are all the rage with this penchant for distressed furniture

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  20. Beautifully done – the imagery was so vivid.
    … children lamenting in Urdu. Dust, like Chapatti flour, …
    Loved it!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  21. Beautifully descriptive writing that evokes all the senses. A poignant story.

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  22. ‘she smelled the warmth of cardamom and cinnamon sizzling in ghee’ creates a lovely image. Nicely done.

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  23. A tender and poignant personal take on Jazlaan’s situation, against the backdrop of Partition- with all its chaos and division. Good story.

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  24. Borders and boundaries are such implacable things

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