Huntress in Suburbia

Friday Fictioneers – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

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Huntress in Suburbia

It always happens to me. Melissa kicked a bucket.
Ouch, it was full of sand. Had she broken her toe?
More rain to come, so the welcome BBQ was off. What will they think?
She had escaped squatting in a squalid basement flat, and after they took her baby, Ellen, away, inside she died. Her pimp, a weak drug dealing scum, had a fortune stashed beneath the floorboards. She put a mickey in his vein and left him to rot.
She bought into suburbia – clean and with a teaching job –an ambitious single woman out to trap a rich husband.

43 responses to “Huntress in Suburbia

  1. I like it when we see why bad people do what they do

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  2. At least she has a plan, I feel sure she will get her man eventually!

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  3. Dear James,

    She has an axe to grind for sure. Methinks there will be other BBQ’s…men beware.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Oh, dear. I was hoping she had changed her ways 🙂

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  5. You get across the hardship of Melissa’s life through the harsh style of the sentences really well. I like the ending, with its surprise optimism.

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  6. perhaps there’s hope for her. perhaps none at all.

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  7. Hopefully she’ll be able to turn her life around.

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  8. She’s on her way up, but I bet one day her past catches up with her…

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  9. Pulled herself up by the socks and got on with it. I hope it stays good but I fear her life doesn’t hold to that

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  10. I fear it will be hard to not let her old life creep in. You can try to hide it or cover it up but methinks it will be difficult. That said, I do wish her well!

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  11. I wish her well in her upward spiral. Just hope it doesn’t reverse.

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  12. You chose a perfect title for your intriguing story. Nice one James.

    My story – Gail’s Gazebo!

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  13. Sounds like quite a character and a survivor for sure.

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  14. This reads like a synopsis for a longer story – when are you going to write it?

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    • Well, yea. Just looked over it again and I guess you are right. It does read like the blurb from the back of a book. I am in the process of bouncing ideas about – I need to get writing again.

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    • Hi Liz,

      I have made a few comments on your site, but they don’t seem to appear. Good luck with your Wolf Pack book. I’ll have a look into it later. I wished I stayed in a warm place like Teneriffe, lucky you.

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  15. She was pushed to far when her child was taken away. Maybe she thought, what’s the point any longer. Get what you can when you can. School of hard knocks and all. Maybe someone will come along… So well written, James!

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  16. What a transformation Melissa has undergone. She should be careful though, lest her past catches up with her.

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  17. A good story and well written, James. I taught and it’s not a guaranteed way to meet a rich man. Sadly, often wealth marries wealth. I think she’s aimed “way” too high. —- Suzanne

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  18. The grief of losing a child has probably helped her into insanity! Poor future husband!

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  19. Very well-written!

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  20. There’s a whole book in that short story. Honestly, there’s probably not much chance she’s going to succeed, but you can’t help but wish her well.

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  21. Melissa is doing everything she can to have a better life… it’s difficult to fault her for that, even if some rich man will be duped by her.

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