Meet Me by the Amaryllis

Friday Fictioneers – Rochelle Wisof-Fields

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Meet me by the Amaryllis

Julie called and told me to meet in the Biosphere by the amaryllis flowers.
Don’t be late, her excitement was infectious. I suspected, she had great news from the fertility clinic.
I booked a table at Antonio’s for later.
Emergency vehicles blocked 5th Avenue and because of the long detour I was late.
Where was she?
The flowers were beautiful – I wondered if they would miss one for Julie’s hair.
I could say it had fallen onto the floor.
It’s not like Julie to be late, I checked my iPhone.
I read the news; three dead on 5th Avenue.

32 responses to “Meet Me by the Amaryllis

  1. Very grim James. Heartbreaking.

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    • I see this flash fiction as open ended. Most of the reader comments assume the worse for Julie. She may only be delayed by the incident in 5th Avenue.
      For me this was a lesson on how to lift the reader’s expectations and let them decide the conclusion.
      Thank you for reading.

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  2. Oh. Oh no…
    Oh this is well told. You certainly tug on the emotion strings here.

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  3. A hopeful, exciting beginning with such a tragic ending. Given the ending, his fleeting thought about getting a flower for her hair is particularly poignant.

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  4. A tragic tale and one that sadly happens to people too

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  5. Such a tragic situation 😦

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  6. This is such a sad story… but at least the Amaryllis was saved.

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  7. Beautifully done, James. When he got delayed, a horrible feeling washed over me. I still hoped, though.

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  8. This is really good 😊

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  9. It started so beautifully and then came along that fateful final line. Great storytelling James.

    Here’s mine!

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  10. A dramatic twist, nicely executed.

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  11. In a split second life can change. Ouch!

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  12. for all you know, she wasn’t one of the dead. unless officially declared, i’d keep my hopes high.

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  13. You paint the contrast between the hopeful waiting in the greenhouse with flowers for her hair and the harsh reality perfectly. The lovely setting makes the story even more heart breaking.

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  14. I saw a bad ending coming, but it still surprised me. That’s one of those heart-dropping moments. Well written.

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  15. I will hope for the best that Julie was not one of the three. There was a traffic jam from the accident.

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  16. A rendezvous by the amaryllis- so romantic, possible news from the fertility clinic – all so hopeful, then dashed. Very dramatic and tragic.

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  17. Oh, no! I didn’t want to be right!

    You’ve done an amazing job of telling this tragedy in stark but not graphic terms.

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  18. Sad story. I guessed what had happened from the first mention of the emergency vehicles.

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  19. Sharon Frame Gay

    Oh James! How sad. I like to think it wasn’t Julie…..that she was just late because of the traffic due to the detour….

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  20. Oh James,

    This went straight for the heart and the gut. Beautifully written, but so sad.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  21. A tragic romance in the finest tradition. Life can be cruel.

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