This week’s picture prompt from Roger is inviting, but I sense a hint of apprehension.
However, the CCTV puts my mind at ease.
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Creepy Landlord
Not as expected, but the rent is cheap and suddenly available.
Sally checked the agency’s note.
The landlord, Mr Bates, had the keys; she knocked.
It’s the top flat.
She followed him into a tiny room.
You’re beautiful. He scratched his beard.
Sorry!
A pretty view. See the park.
Oh yes, nice.
Is that jasmine shampoo?
She moved to the exit.
No, no, this way.
A dark bedroom with narrow windows, a carpet stain and a new mattress.
He scratched at his neck. Should we forget about this month’s rent?
She smiled. Maybe not, as my boyfriend would kill you.
She should run, not walk, to the nearest exit!
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I did have her running away, but changed the story to shift the status between the characters.
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The running away was better left for us to decide. Good call!
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I suspect that threat will not suffice for long. She’s inadvertently given him to understand she might be up for it, but for the boyfriend’s jealousy
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Very creepy. In a movie based on a Jim Thompson movie, that was how Annette Benning paid the rent. The Grifters..
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I wonder who will maintain the upper hand? Many thanks.
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Seems he’s met his match. Nice one James.
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Yep, I wanted her to turn the power around. Thanks for reading.
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The stain and the new mattress had me wanting to run! Creepy, those Bates guys!
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Sure are. thank you.
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Something tells me a woman as savvy as she is won’t be taking this room. Nice one.
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wow, what a comeback! 🙂
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Good story sticking close to the prompt picture. Somewhat expected the creepy scene but wanted to yell “HiHo, Silver,” the the boyfriend is mentioned. 😀
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I hope she has pepper spray… just in case…
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Form the way he’s acting, I have a feeling he’s going to attract the boyfriend’s attention before too long.
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Hmmmmm I’m thinking it’s not her boyfriend to be worried about…
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I’m sure she can handle herself.
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He is creepy but she seems to be handling herself and him very well.
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That was creepy. So well done! Glad she stood her ground, but hope she got out of there quickly.
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Dear James,
I can’t imagine Sally wanting to stay there, but it does seem she can take care of herself. Still…
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Your story is full of quiet menace. She needs to run for it!
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Sordid every which way. Dylan’s, “and you stare into the vacuum of his eyes and he says, ‘do you want to make a deal.’ ” Nice atmosphere building.
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She sure can handle herself and him!
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Good thing he showed his true colors before she moved in, not afterwards!
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We all need those moments of calm before stressful situations. An early morning walk along the beach would be perfect. Nicely done!
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Thanks Brenda.
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