A Dash to Freedom

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This week’s prompt is interesting as it reminds me of the many storms and monsoons I have experienced.

If this was a holiday snap, I hope that Brenda’s holiday went well despite the storm and they enjoyed the experience.

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PHOTO PROMPT © Brenda Cox

A Dash to Freedom

Mai Ling ordered black coffee.

The uprooted trees symbolised the turmoil in her thoughts, a burning itch of fire ants on her skin.
The bitter drink aggravated the snake coiled in her belly, a mixture of freedom with the dread of discovery.

Last night’s tempest thundered like a herd of stampeding buffalo battering the hotel with spears of rain, and the window crashed across the room.
She acted on impulse, a frenzied flash of angry until the bedsheets resembled an impressionist canvas of red.

Her cup rattled in the morning quiet.
The train departs at seven and she will travel alone.

32 responses to “A Dash to Freedom

  1. I enjoyed the metaphorical tempest brewing and exploding into reality. I hope she makes that train.

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  2. What a fabulous description of stormy rage. I could even picture it. Poor bugger won’t be joining her…

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  3. Wow! Great descriptions of her emotional turmoil. Her escape sounds like its on a clock. Great tension

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  4. It sounds as though it was a night to remember. Sadly one person may not have that luxury.

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  5. A great description of an angry storm inside and out. Nicely done!

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  6. Dear James,

    The rage is tangible. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. The rage is potent. Fantastic imagery!

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  8. A tempest within and without. I wonder what drove her to it? An abusive spouse perhaps.

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  9. michael1148humphris

    A great bit of story telling,

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    • Thanks Michael, I enjoyed your story ‘Why” and agree that we are pushing the trees back all the time. I have planted three trees in my garden this year, while my neighbour has had three large ones removed. Take care.

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  10. You told just the right amount of information in this scenario to get my curiosity going. Despite all you describe she felt and did, I’m still rooting for her 🙂

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  11. James,
    Spent rage and murder: stormy weather. Powerfully written scene of the price of freedom.
    pax,
    dora

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  12. Free at last! A riveting tale James.

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  13. Your powerful writing reflects the turmoil of emotions she felt after killing.

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  14. Great imagery and description of thoughts and fears. this was great James.

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  15. That took an unexpected turn. I would have thought of rage and murder but saw in the comments that she was a kidnapping victim. I hope she gets away fast.

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  16. Wow, the tension is thick. I hope she makes it to freedom. I think the storm was her savior, now she must get away. Well done!

    The photo was taken a five-minute walk from our apartment after Typhoon Mangkhut hit Hong Kong in 2018. We were living in HK at the time. The winds damaged our windows and our flat was flooded. It was intense, but we were okay.

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    • Thank goodness. I lived near Pat Heung by the Kam Tin road in the New Territories. Once there was a huge fire across Tai Mo Shan heading down Route Twist towards our homes.

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      • Oh no, that’s scary. We’ve lived in and out of Hong Kong but I remember a big fire around 2008 on Tai Mo Shan when we were living in Discovery Bay. I’m glad your home was missed and you were okay.

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  17. Oh, that was powerful.

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  18. I wonder what happened to provoke this

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  19. Ooh, she’d better get to that train quick! So much imagery in this piece, you created quite a scene.

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