The First Sentence

This week’s Friday-Fictioneers prompt from Rochelle felt a touch claustrophobic for me as I prefer some natural light. The picture reminded me of a basement where the writer had been banished until something productive was produced. My theme for this week.

All other stories from the group are available HERE.

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The First Sentence

I murdered five people in my basement. Backed into a corner, my victims stumbled to their death unwittingly. Did I feel any compassion for them? Strangely, I worried myself asleep with utter sadness.

Susan was the youngest, a pretty corporate lawyer; I fell in love with the way she cocked her head and gave a smug smile.
Jack! Well! An obnoxious obese taxi driver now rotting in several landfill sites.

I craved the psychological tension, the excitement of twisting my victims’ lives with unresolved conflicts and agonising passions.

My best seller.
If only I can fix my troublesome first sentence.

28 responses to “The First Sentence

  1. A slave to his craft obviously. I liked his sadness

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  2. Write the story and then come back to the first sentence 🙂

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  3. I’m going to convince myself it’s all about the book and nothing else.

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  4. When you’ve fixed the first sentence you’ll probably have a problem with the second one … and so on!

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  5. Writers can be a cruel bunch. Why not try: “It was a dark and stormy night when a shot rang out…”?

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  6. i can relate. the first sentence is always the hardest. 🙂

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  7. A bit of a struggle sometimes to get that first sentence just right.
    Nicely done …

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  8. Haha. You had me there. Great twist, but I can’t let go of the suspicion that it’s not all fiction. 🤨

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  9. You’re most welcome. And thanks for the offer, but perhaps not. 🫣

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  10. I’d say his first sentence is the least of his worries. Especially since it will get (the) attention of law enforcement. Strangely, Stephen King and Neil Gaiman seem to have cast a cloaking spell on the authorities…

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  11. You pulled me in with the first sentence. I hope I don’t get pulled all the way to the basement.

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  12. I like the twist at the end. And I think you nailed the first sentence of your FF story!

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  13. Dear James,

    Ah the writerly dilemma. You captured it well, from the first sentence to the last. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  14. Hahahaha darned books… nightmare writer’s existence James! Great last line.

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  15. Yikes. Cold chills from the first two words all the way to the end! Good writing!

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